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an assignment for typography class. we're supposed to make a poster advertising a typeface, and i chose eurostile because it's awesome.
initially i had the whole thing flipped on the vertical axis, with the baselines aligned with the edges of the page. i had to change it for the sake of legibility, though, since the entire top line of text was upside down.
if you notice the copy seems a bit contrived, that's because one of the criteria for the assignment was that it has to include every letter of the alphabet. rather than just write out the alphabet, i decided to make it interesting and write a pangram. writing pangrams is hard, especially when you have to write one that makes sense and pertains to a certain subject. so pardon the somewhat inappropriate uses of the words "jubilant" and "exquisite," i was really stuck on j and q.
this isn't the final copy, since the poster needs to be hand-rendered; i still have to print it out and trace it and color it with marker. that's going to be such a drag. sigh.
anyway, i still hope to improve this before the final copy, if i can. so please critique to your heart's content. i don't want any of that "it looks nice" business. ;)

EDIT: thanks to some very helpful feedback from ~Cedarseed, i've improved on the original design and updated it. i'm still open to more suggestions, though.

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:iconcedarseed:
I like it very much, but that white curve on top is very distracting without meaning anything. I'd rather it was balanced by the car shape at the bopttom -- either by making it pink, or by making the other white -- you'll be able to figure out what to do better than me.
The word Eurostile would gain by being moved a bit: it's a bit too close to the diagonal, it makes it look stuck and breaks the line's movement.
Hmm one last thought: I think the top curve should be in some sort of relationship with the type, it looks very gratuitous this way... either let the type rest on it or push it up to support the type or let them meet in-between, somethign like that.
Being nitpicky because you asked us to be :)
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those are all great suggestions. i changed the white curve to pink and immediately noticed an improvement. i'll work on it some more to try to figure out how to implement the other changes you suggested, since i think they'll all help. thank you so much for the wonderful critique :)
:iconcedarseed:
No problem, it's a pleasure to see someone working on typography!
:iconindierockboy:
vote kerry.

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100% of the profits from sales of my prints go to Amnesty International.
:iconartisticsnail:
slacker. get back to work.
actually, i'm about to update the fixed version. let me know what you think.
:iconcedarseed:
Wow!! I love how you solved the text/curve issue! This really works now, awesome!
:iconartisticsnail:
thanks! it wouldn't have been possible without your help :)
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i know this isn't helpful at all, but i wouldn't change a thing.

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deus ex machina.
deepblue.
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it's good to have a vote of confidence :) the first version needed some work, but i'm pretty satisfied with it now.

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